I wander the world stage and find objects of past performances
the broken child, the injured mother
I wander the world stage and find objects of past performances
the broken mirror, the shattered lamp
The curtain rises and falls, the people leave their seats
the performance is done
The curtain rises and falls, the people leave their seats
the doors to the outside world are open
The lights, the sounds, the smell of the city
the outside world distracts
The lights, the sounds, the smell of the city
the performance has become a memory
The memory of a time long past
sometimes it seems like a play
The memory of a time long past
like someone else did the acting
Acting out the things within
the demons we all must face
Acting out the things within
humanity is all our concern
I wander the world stage and find objects of past performances
the smiling child, the happy mother
I wander the world stage and find objects of past performances
a full length mirror, a bright-lit lamp
The curtain rises and falls, the people stay in their seats
the performance has held them firm
The curtain rises and falls, the people stay in their seats
the outside world awaits in silence
Memory. The performances of the past, holding firm.
Mirror. It all reflects just what it sees.
Lamp. It lights the darkness but creates a shadow.
Outside. Sometimes better than inside ... but not always.
Performance. Memory. Life.
The curtain rises and falls.
Love the flow and the rhythm of this poem, and your use of repetition.
ReplyDeleteI also love that metaphor-- how our "performance" (dealing with our past, our demons?) affects the "audience" (those who are watching us?) I am probably just scratching the surface though here with this...will need to think about it more.
The mirror and the lamp are interesting symbols as well.
This is really nice!
Stylistically fine but a little to humanistic for my liking.
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ReplyDeleteBe careful that you do not confuse human experience with humanistic response.
I find myself very connected to the human experience because, well, it's real. It doesn't mean its right, that its honest, that it glorifies God. It just means it's real. In the midst of that reality we find God seeking us out, drawing us to Himself, that the real experience will be right, will be honest, will glorify Him.
Hence the contrast between the world (outside the theatre of our experience) and God (deeply immersed in our lives and affecting others by it)
I was tempted to respond but perhaps you'd rather I give you time to think on it more? ;)
ReplyDeleteI shouldn't tease like that but you seem a thoughtful person who would like to reflect on it more before I open it up. :)
I was very tired when I wrote that! With a considerably less fuzzy head today I am able to see a bit more... more clearly.
ReplyDeleteThis seems to be a poem of contrasts: the "real" world (it affects us?) vs. the "artificial" world (we create it and affect it?) , our internal world (our focus and where our heart is?) vs. the external world (distraction from what is important to us?) , the performer (our actions?) vs. the audience (those affected by our actions?), and stanzas 1and 2 contrast with 6 and 7.
I am certain that you may have some other thoughts in mind with this, but this is what I am seeing :)
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